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averygoodun42I have finally (finally, finally) gone back and edited chapter 2 so that it makes more sense, and have updated it at both Ashwinder and TPP. I apologize for a) how long it's taken, and b) the crappy writing in the first place. I'll try to do better from now on. =)
Thank you to those who (politely) asked, "WTF?"
(We come into the middle of the argument between Poppy and Hermione. Poppy is just getting up steam.)
“Oh, don’t play innocent with me. You know he brewed a very difficult potion to cure you after the battle, don’t you?” Madam Pomfrey asked condescendingly. Hermione nodded curtly. “Well, then I’m sure you know that afterwards he seemed to take it upon himself to make sure you were all right. He watched your eating habits, worried about your weight loss, and even looked into the potion being to blame for your general malaise. And then all this foolishness over Remus came to the forefront, and he felt he had to save you from the fate you seemed hell bent on throwing yourself into.”
Here Madam Pomfrey stopped, huffing in righteous indignation. Hermione stared at her, blinking several times as she processed the mediwitch’s version.
“So, I’m at fault because he chose to save me of his own volition?” she finally managed to get out when it seemed Pomfrey wasn’t going to say anything further.
“From what I heard, he owed you a life debt. Of course he was going to do anything he could to save you.”
An old suspicion floated into Hermione’s mind, one that she didn’t really want to contemplate, so she tried to ignore it.
“So you believe that Severus only rescued me because the gaes of the life debt forced him to?”
“Why ever else would he do such a thing for one of his students?”
“I don’t know, but I do know that he didn’t owe me a life debt. Ever. He owed Ronald Weasley a life debt, but that was voided when Ron died. I don’t know what you might think, but I expect that my husband chose to save me because that’s what he wanted to do, not because of an expired debt.”
Madam Pomfrey looked a little taken aback at Hermione’s confrontational tone but settled into a dismissive look. “If that’s what you want to believe, then go ahead and believe it, deary. But next time, you’d best send your husband to me before he’s on the verge of dying.”
Hermione stepped in front of the fireplace to block Madam Pomfrey’s exit. “How dare you suggest that I’d be so callous!”
Pomfrey just sniffed.
“And I guess, in your mind, I was going after Remus as an insidious plot to snare Severus? I came up with the idea for the stupid law, then went out, plotted seeds of revenge in renegade Death Eaters’ minds, making sure they didn’t kill me first, and then played along as Dumbledore, Minerva, and everyone else started panicking over the bill because I wanted to marry Severus fucking Snape?
Pomfrey looked a little confused when Hermione mentioned the law, but by Hermione's last words she looked ready to explode. “Well, knowing your penchant for danger, there’s few rules left to break, now aren’t there?”
Better, non? (PS: If you see any errors, grammatical, punctuational (lol) or otherwise, please let me know.)
(Oh, and just so you know, I feel much saner today. Amazing what a good night's sleep will accomplish!)
Thank you to those who (politely) asked, "WTF?"
(We come into the middle of the argument between Poppy and Hermione. Poppy is just getting up steam.)
“Oh, don’t play innocent with me. You know he brewed a very difficult potion to cure you after the battle, don’t you?” Madam Pomfrey asked condescendingly. Hermione nodded curtly. “Well, then I’m sure you know that afterwards he seemed to take it upon himself to make sure you were all right. He watched your eating habits, worried about your weight loss, and even looked into the potion being to blame for your general malaise. And then all this foolishness over Remus came to the forefront, and he felt he had to save you from the fate you seemed hell bent on throwing yourself into.”
Here Madam Pomfrey stopped, huffing in righteous indignation. Hermione stared at her, blinking several times as she processed the mediwitch’s version.
“So, I’m at fault because he chose to save me of his own volition?” she finally managed to get out when it seemed Pomfrey wasn’t going to say anything further.
“From what I heard, he owed you a life debt. Of course he was going to do anything he could to save you.”
An old suspicion floated into Hermione’s mind, one that she didn’t really want to contemplate, so she tried to ignore it.
“So you believe that Severus only rescued me because the gaes of the life debt forced him to?”
“Why ever else would he do such a thing for one of his students?”
“I don’t know, but I do know that he didn’t owe me a life debt. Ever. He owed Ronald Weasley a life debt, but that was voided when Ron died. I don’t know what you might think, but I expect that my husband chose to save me because that’s what he wanted to do, not because of an expired debt.”
Madam Pomfrey looked a little taken aback at Hermione’s confrontational tone but settled into a dismissive look. “If that’s what you want to believe, then go ahead and believe it, deary. But next time, you’d best send your husband to me before he’s on the verge of dying.”
Hermione stepped in front of the fireplace to block Madam Pomfrey’s exit. “How dare you suggest that I’d be so callous!”
Pomfrey just sniffed.
“And I guess, in your mind, I was going after Remus as an insidious plot to snare Severus? I came up with the idea for the stupid law, then went out, plotted seeds of revenge in renegade Death Eaters’ minds, making sure they didn’t kill me first, and then played along as Dumbledore, Minerva, and everyone else started panicking over the bill because I wanted to marry Severus fucking Snape?
Pomfrey looked a little confused when Hermione mentioned the law, but by Hermione's last words she looked ready to explode. “Well, knowing your penchant for danger, there’s few rules left to break, now aren’t there?”
Better, non? (PS: If you see any errors, grammatical, punctuational (lol) or otherwise, please let me know.)
(Oh, and just so you know, I feel much saner today. Amazing what a good night's sleep will accomplish!)
