And now for something completely different!

[averygoodun42]

It's late, my judgment is probably impaired, but I'm going to post this here anyway.

Inspired by the 'Lily' challenge (and the 'one is not like the other' challenge) at grangersnape100, but it wouldn't work for points there. In the morning I shall review and see if I still like it.



Three Lilies

I.

White with innocence, the petals arch
opening, spreading
tempting a hand
A heart
A life

But for him, it remains perfect
Ideal

His touch stains it orange


II.

The graceful, exotic lines draw him in
Curling around his senses
Until he, too, is spotted
Marked

The trumpet call of fame and fortune
Withers quickly

The stain remains


Drowning, he pulls
Pulls himself up
Up toward the light


III.

The petals curve protectively inward, entrancing him
He dares not touch
Both are too delicate

But as the bloom unfurls, letting him see inside
He knows

This is no star

This is his sun

Comments

[dickgloucester.livejournal.com]

Love it.

[averygoodun.livejournal.com]

Really? *wibbles*

[dickgloucester.livejournal.com]

Yes really. I know poetry is really personal and it can be devastating to get a negative crit, so I don't comment if I don't like. But I DO like this triptych of yours.

[averygoodun.livejournal.com]

*hugs* Thank you!